The first essay was enjoyable to write. It's a personal goal of mine to record many of my experiences from living in Mexico. Thus, the opportunity to write about this time was something that I enjoyed. One thing that went well was my attempt to write vivid descriptions of particular instances. I would like for other people to read these anecdotes and be able to access the richness of the memories. One struggle I have with writing these stories is in choosing what story to focus on and how to tailor out all of the other details that could distract from that story.
In my revisions of this essay I hope to make particular things that I say more clear. I was hoping to suggest that language learning is a process that is natural, living, and uncontrollable. We can't force it, and we probably won't know when it's happening. Particular details that I included in my story may not have supported this idea, so I want to make sure that everything lines up. This way, a reader can read my piece and understand my message, even if I'm not there to explain.
I had hoped that my next essay would also talk about some of my experiences living in Mexico, or maybe from my visit to Hong Kong this summer. However, I was not feeling inspired for anything in particular about these experiences. So I chose instead to write about family vacations (none of which were that exotic). I want to record some of the beautiful memories I have. I'm not sure what I hope to see in terms of craft. I will just continue to play around with the possibilities offered by sectioning and see how best I can communicate my “point”.
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