The Eye essays have been harder for me that the I essays. I enjoy talking about my experiences, but crafting a point from them is not always easy.
I either wanted to write more about my experiences in Mexico or from my trip to Hong Kong this summer. Since essay 3 did not go very well (I diverged into all kinds of details & had trouble sticking to the point) I tried again to think of the point first, then later decide the story to tell the point through. I wondered how I could describe the culture of Hong Kong, and somehow came up with the idea of describing the Hong Kong Museum of Art.
I did a brainstorming session and wrote very quickly everything that came to mind. The result was alot of details that could say things about Hong Kong's past and present culture, all mixed together. I ended up describing the Victoria harbor as well (where the museum is, a famous & important part of HK). So the essay will be roughly split into those two things. I've struggled a little in how to organize the essay from my brainstorming notes; a lot of details overlap but don't necessarily progress in a linear fashion. because of this it's taking me a little longer to revise this draft. However, I'm much happier with it than with Essay 3 and I feel like I'm getting the idea of the Eye essays. My only concern is that I may be describing the museum in a way that is broad (hitting many things) instead of deep (looking closely at a handful of things). I don't know if this is a problem. I'm not sure how deep I can go based on my memory of a 1 day trip there. but we'll see how it turns out.
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